读后续写I woke at 5:30 A.M. after a restless night’s sleep. I slowly unzipped the tent door to inspect t

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摘要: 读后续写 (满分25分)
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。
续写的词数应为150左右。
I woke at 5:30 A.M. after a restless night&r

With my heart quickening, I grabbed my loaded flare gun and carefully walked sideways a few steps to Charlie. Without taking my eyes off the bear, I led him to the sled and fastened his chain to a rope. The bear was getting closer. Remembering all the Inuit had told me, I fired a warning shot to the bear’s left. But on she came. Then, I fired a flare right in front of her. She stopped and looked at me. Then she fixed her eyes on Charlie, who was barking wildly. She looked back at her cubs and waited for them to catch up, then finally moved away toward my right.
The whole event lasted fifteen minutes but seemed years long. My hands were shaking as I stood still, watching the three slowly move north. But despite the fear, I could feel deep down inside a real satisfaction. I now knew that I could stand up to a bear in the wild and stay calm enough to function and still remember the words from the Inuit. With Charlie’s help I had passed my first test.
【解析】
【分析】
本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知,作者早上从北极的帐篷中醒来,给他的狗Charlie喂了食,走出帐篷没看到任何熊的踪迹,想起因纽特人说的遇到熊的做法,因为时间还早所以决定悠闲地吃一顿早饭,突然看到一只母熊带着两只幼崽向自己走来。
【详解】续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:心跳加快,我抓住信号枪,小心地向一边的Charlie走了几步……所以应该写作者看到熊后的反应,即走向Charlie把它拴在绳子上,抓住信号枪向熊开枪警告,熊听到枪声后的反应及Charlie看大熊后的反应内容等。第二段开头是:整个事件持续了十五分钟,但似乎是持续了几年……本段应该熊离开后作者的反应,比如是否会感到害怕,以及从这次与熊的相遇中的收获等内容。
续写时要求使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语增加了写作难度,我们要熟悉所给划线词语,恰当的时候加以运用。最后还要注意所续写短文的词数应为150左右;续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:take off,in front of,move away等高级词汇;that I could stand up to a bear in the wild and stay calm enough to function and still remember the words from the Inuit 引导的宾语从句,as I stood still引导的伴随状语从句,With my heart quickening...with复合结构等高级句式。
 
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