续写 Old Man Donovan was a mean man who hated children. He threw rocks at them and even shot at them w

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摘要: 续写
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
Old Man Donovan was a mean man who hated children. He threw

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Every summer, we would visit Mr. Donovan and talk to him. We shared with him our colorful experience at school while he kept giving out his luscious fruits to us as usual. As time went by, we seemed to be more a family than good friends. But one summer, we were informed that he was seriously ill and we were anxious and restless, feeling like sitting on pins and needles. We rushed straight to the hospital to see his health condition. Weak as he was, he comforted us that it wasn’t a big deal.
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The next winter, word got around that Old Man Donovan had died. Hearing the bad news, I felt a lump in my throat, tears welling up in my eyes. The wind whistled through the trees, as if mourning for the death of Donovan. I realized gone were the days when we sat together chatting with each other. However, he left us a hidden treasure-his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage of time.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇故事类读后续写。
【详解】本篇书面表达是读后续写。通过阅读所给文章可知,作者听到多诺万老头是个讨厌孩子的卑鄙小人的可怕传闻,不敢去拿走他的水果。后来的一天,作者和姐姐大胆的进入多诺万老人的农场,收到了甘美的水果,也发现藏在他粗哑声音背后的那颗甜蜜、善良的心。他就成了作者最喜欢聊天的人之一。续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:每年夏天,我们都会去拜访多诺万先生,和他交谈。所以应该续写作者和老人交谈的内容,以及作者和老人的关系日益亲密。且根据下一段开头提示可知,此段应为老人去世作铺垫。第二段开头是:第二年冬天,多诺万老人去世的消息传开了。本段应该写我对老人去世的态度,表明心中的悲痛之情。文章最后表明老人为作者留下的宝藏是老人的善良的心。续写时要根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右,按要求完成写作任务。
【点睛】本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:give out,chat with,die away等高级词汇;which引导的非限制性定语从句“he left us a hidden treasure-his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage of time.”,when引导的定语从句“I realized gone were the days when we sat together chatting with each other.”。
 
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